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Penski
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USA
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 Posted - 11/06/2009 : 10:19:23 PM
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I love missing scenes, Sister Grace, and you did a wonderful job portraying the boys while in jail. Very cute how Kid led Heyes on knowing he had the keys.
"Do you ever get the feeling that nothing right is ever going to happen to us again?" - Kid Curry |
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storm
Starting Member
USA
48 Posts |
 Posted - 11/07/2009 : 08:03:37 AM
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Allegra - Very touching. A wonderful tribute to your mom and brother.
Ghislaine - Loved it.
Grace - Nice missing scene. I don't know what the editors were thinking when the cut it. |
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Maz
New Member
United Kingdom
79 Posts |
Posted - 11/07/2009 : 6:59:22 PM
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At last I have finished the October challenges...beam
Love them all, left handed gun, Kid's terrible nightmare from the past, Granda Pa Curry returning...great..and sheesh now there's November to start!!
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Maz
New Member
United Kingdom
79 Posts |
Posted - 11/07/2009 : 7:07:58 PM
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I am up to date!!!!
Lovely thoughtful tale Allegra
Cute list Ghislaine...but who could these 21st century ladies be?
Grace...oh course Kid is a blessing..beam
"How could you forget about breakfast?" |
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Kwiltn
Starting Member
USA
18 Posts |
Posted - 11/10/2009 : 1:49:11 PM
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Ghislaine -- very good top ten picks, though I was kinda fond of Heyes' singing and I bet Kid coulda really bust it loose with the right gal!
Sister Grace-- Funny how Kid let Heyes rant on and on. Bless his nimble fingers, and the wisdom of Grampa Curry. |
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Frankie
Junior Member
United Kingdom
213 Posts |
Posted - 11/10/2009 : 3:14:59 PM
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 Very funny Ghislaine! Me thinks you think way too much about ASJ - if that's possible!
I have a particular fondness for the jingling keys scene Grace and wish more had been made of Kid's amazing pick pocketing skills throughout the series.  You certainly did it justice in this little ditty!
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'All I ever learned from love is how to shoot someone who out drew ya!'
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Iona
Starting Member
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Posted - 11/11/2009 : 08:55:49 AM
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Great story AllegraW. Very thought provoking.
Ghislaine. Especially like the line about the speed of the train.
Sister Grace. Wonderful scene. Loved the last line - when I count my blessings Kid, I could you twice. |
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Max
Moderator
United Kingdom
213 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 09:21:01 AM
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Awww Sister G...
We all love the pilot so much and you treat us to a little bit more of one of the great scenes...
And yeah - that is a great last line.
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Leading a model life of temperance, moderation and tranquility |
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Ghislaine
Moderator
USA
290 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 10:02:54 AM
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Dang, Max!  No one does childhood better than you! I was laughing my head off at all the great lines--way too many to enumerate here--and thinking how well you'd got the whinging tween down (and, dare I say, Alex, too?). You put a great spin on the counting blessings prompt. And then the whole mood suddenly changed, and the story became wonderful in a totally different way. The coda was very effective. So sad, and Heyes must be feeling a ton of guilt. Thankfully, Jed is there to support him.
Oh! Thought!  Could this story be the start of a series about the Valparaiso Years? Say yes--pretty please?? 
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This is one of my schemes... ~ Hannibal Heyes |
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Iona
Starting Member
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Posted - 11/11/2009 : 12:23:59 PM
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Aww Max. You've got me reaching for the tissues. Like Ghislaine says, you do these childhood stories so well.
Love Heyes worrying that girls wouldn't be interested in him because of the state of his clothes.
and yes - be careful what you wish for. So sad.
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AllegraW
New Member
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Posted - 11/11/2009 : 12:38:28 PM
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Crikey, Max - I did not see that one coming at all. I was all busy smiling to myself about adolescent hormone levels and then it all went pear-shaped.  Very well done, but a harsh lesson for young Hannibal, don't you think, when the only crime was that of being a pre-teen with attitude. How truly awful for him - poor little boy. A super read.
I believe in getting into hot water - it helps keep you clean. -Chesterton |
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Penski
Moderator
USA
243 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 1:06:00 PM
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Max, you had my wish come true! I always wanted a Calico story about the raiders coming to the house and I got it. So detailed...down to the pimples on a young adolescent Han. Very good story and did Han ever grow up in the two months, huh?
"Do you ever get the feeling that nothing right is ever going to happen to us again?" - Kid Curry |
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Maz
New Member
United Kingdom
79 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 4:42:02 PM
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Oh sheesh..well no need to write a challenge now..we all know where the bandana is going...childhood tales, death scene and orflings...all that was missing was the kitten.
Bravo Max..wonderful tale.
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Frankie
Junior Member
United Kingdom
213 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 4:57:26 PM
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I'm kinda glad I'm only writing for kudos this month!
It was worth the wait Max.
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'All I ever learned from love is how to shoot someone who out drew ya!'
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nm131
Junior Member
USA
102 Posts |
Posted - 11/11/2009 : 6:17:54 PM
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I guess we know how Calico would have ended the Heyes and Curry story now. Everyone already identified the emotional journey I experienced as I read the story. All I can say is bravo! My mind just went completely blank and the pen dried up.
Live always in the best company when you read....He was a one-book man. Some men have only one book in them others ,a library -Sydney Smith, 1771-1845 |
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